I read the essay by Nisey Williams entitled Why I Hate Britney Spears. Overall I would give this essay the grade of an A, maybe A-. I felt that she represented her argument well. She had a good combination of personal opinions, statistical evidence, and research-based information. She included quotes from many different sources, including well known talk shows, news stations, newspapers, and some various websites. She even included an example of the experience one of her coworkers has had in trying to find appropriate clothing for her tween daughter. She also represents arguments that people might make against her argument, explores it, and effectively proves that argument wrong. Her writing style held my interest as a reader. The structure of her essay made it easy to follow, and she never strayed from her topic. She had a clear topic and thesis statement, and repeatedly related her essay directly to what she said in her thesis statement.
The only thing I found that I would argue was Williams’ statement that parents couldn’t find clothes for their children that didn’t show too much skin. I know that to be false. I see young girls with nice looking clothes that fully cover their bodies, and whenever I shop for clothes I see the clothes in the girls section that, while it definitely follows specific trends, and sometimes the skirts tend to be shorter than I think they should be for girls that age (or any age), overall finding clothes for tween girls that do now show excessive amounts of skin is not too difficult.
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